Elevator Pitch No. 2
https://youtu.be/jvuEOvp7cNc
Most the feedback I received in my previous elevator pitch was positive. I did notice that someone commented that I could eliminate the excess that I talked about the people who are experiencing the devastation left behind as a result of the Hurricane. It was suggested I could shorten my video since they were starting to get bored with the details.
I took this into account and tried to shorten the length of my video and not dredge out the details as much. I found this helpful. Also, from my own analysis I noticed I could use more eye contact and speak slower so my audience could follow along easy. I tried to incorporate this in my second elevator pitch. I think this pitch is more to the point with a clear description of what the goal is.
Most the feedback I received in my previous elevator pitch was positive. I did notice that someone commented that I could eliminate the excess that I talked about the people who are experiencing the devastation left behind as a result of the Hurricane. It was suggested I could shorten my video since they were starting to get bored with the details.
I took this into account and tried to shorten the length of my video and not dredge out the details as much. I found this helpful. Also, from my own analysis I noticed I could use more eye contact and speak slower so my audience could follow along easy. I tried to incorporate this in my second elevator pitch. I think this pitch is more to the point with a clear description of what the goal is.
Hey Victoria, I think you do a good job of highlighting how devastating this kind of natural disaster can be to families. While I don't think you should have shortened your pitch as much as you did, you did get right to the point and were very clear. I think that keeping that extra time would have allowed you to go into a few more details, but I can't be sure if that would even be necessary. Next time dress up and bring a little more energy!
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