Hi Victoria, I think your pitch was overall well-rounded. You hit all of the points or questions I had from your previous post and really elaborated on key issues with your pitch. One thing I would consider is cutting down your description of the scenario. You started to lose my attention a little when you described who was being involved. I think keeping it shorter would hit home with your audience and convey a deeper connection of empathy and a desire to help.
Victoria, I think you did a great job in your elevator speech. I thought it was great how you hooked us about the background information about the hurricane. This taught us some information that many may have not known yet. These people in the panhandle really need our help because they are not getting as much attention as they should be anymore.
Hi Victoria,
ReplyDeleteI think your pitch was overall well-rounded. You hit all of the points or questions I had from your previous post and really elaborated on key issues with your pitch. One thing I would consider is cutting down your description of the scenario. You started to lose my attention a little when you described who was being involved. I think keeping it shorter would hit home with your audience and convey a deeper connection of empathy and a desire to help.
Victoria,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job in your elevator speech. I thought it was great how you hooked us about the background information about the hurricane. This taught us some information that many may have not known yet. These people in the panhandle really need our help because they are not getting as much attention as they should be anymore.